Abandoned Forum

[Manwithbeard]

I wrote this after a particularly bad breakup...so yeah, here it is.

My Heart
Through the shattered glass I walk
My feet do bleed but I'll not stop
At the end my heart does lie
Repaired again yet shattered nigh

The wind does blow through that desolate land
Where my heart used to stand
When will the healing rain come?

She broke my heart as I stood dumb
I thought her words would strike me down
I was lucky, they caused a frown

Though the words shattered my heart
A single piece was not blown apart
In a cloak of indifference and good humor
It did grow back like a tumor
Slowly, Painfully, But now I am able to love once more.

[nil]

Take care of your heart,
warm it before a hearth,
even if it can grow back like a tumor,
it can still be stolen by a lemur....

[Mysti]

This is a comment on your old poem as you requested.

[Mysti]

*steals copyright of the poem and steals it for herself, selling the poem to literary organisations and making a pocketful of coins*

[Manwithbeard]

Damn you all! My royalty checks, go get your own with your own bloody poem!

[Bomadeno]

* steals the poem too and sells it on ebay at £5 a copy including VAT *

Well done for writing poetry at all in that state.. When I suffered the one break up i've ever had to suffer, I was left destroyed beyond repair, truly a city in ruins, certainly incapable of writing poetry. I can't really comment on the poetryish nature, as i have difficulty reading things in poem form, but i like the words and feeling of it. They rang some bells I have, so I imagine they ring other peopel's bells as well. One day I might write a poem.. and the world might probably end.

Also, was I not a lemur? Shall I start stealing hearts?

[Manwithbeard]

thank you, i had some very nice times with my guitar, which happens to be quite the therapist.

Sorry if i sound sexists for this, but oh well. Damn women. Can't live with em, can't live without em.

[Mysti]

It's a good poem - apparently teddy bears can be pillars of support after a break-up... something to bear in mind

[Manwithbeard]

[Mysti]

[Pimienta]

very nice poem it catches the feelings of regrowing a broken heart. I also did not write poetry after my one and only break up, I wrote a prose of sorts about a bird

however now that my heart is grown again I am getting married so

[Bomadeno]

I don't think it's sexist. It would semm all men damn all women, and all women damn all men. (at some point or other)

Speaking of sexism, I saw an advert the other day that was so incredibly sexist against men. If it had been at women, there would have been absolute uproar, but somehow it was being aired on one of our major tv stations. If I find it on youtube or something I'll post it here...

[Manwithbeard]

I must see it.

[Pimienta]

I don't think your comment is sexist either because women are evil in it's purest form and men are the devil

so of course you can't live with women

but then on the other hand if there were no women there would be no babies and then the species would die so you can't live without them

[Manwithbeard]

well then, I'm glad to know i haven't offended anyone